Descriptive Writing

At the moment in class we have been working on descriptive writing. We have been using pictures to give us ideas of what to write about. Here is a peice if writing I did.

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The Abandoned Cottage

As I walk through the  peaceful forest the sky suddenly turns grey. I feel rain thumping on my head. With panic I spin around looking for some shelter. Suddenly something catches my eye. I sprint towards it and arrive at an overgrown, stone  cottage. I stare with wonder. What happened here? Is anyone in there? I run my hand over its rough, stoney edges and look up at its moss covered roof. There is a huge pohutakawa tree growing out of the shattered roof.

Suddenly there is a clatter and a bang from inside the cottage. “Hello,” I say nervously “Is anyone there ?” Something draws me closer. I can hear my heart pounding in my chest. When I reach a hole in the front I peek my head through to see what's there. I see nothing and slowly go inside. The parauri (brown) roots of the pohutakawa tree are covering almost everything in the room. There is a fireplace in the corner furthest from the hole. Bits of rakau (wood) are everywhere. There is smell a slight smell of ash. It looked like this place hadn’t been abandoned very long.

The floor groans as I slowly back out. I look up at the beautiful whero (red) and kakariki (green) tree. I wish those surrounded the city. By now the rain has stopped but it’s really makariri (cold). Shivers run up my spine. I want to go but I know I will stumble across this place again someday.