My Taniwha - Writing

For the past few weeks we have been practising using descriptive language in our writing.We have been trying to 'paint pictures with words.' We all got to event our own taniwha.  We all drew our own taniwha and then we had write about it and describe what it looks like, what we do with our taniwha and what our taniwha is like. Then we read our work to a buddy and they had a go at drawing our taniwha.    

Create and Describe Your Own Creature

(Nogard - Taniwha)

WALT: be descriptive in our writing.  

Look at the description of a Nogard.  Now Create and describe your own creature that you will then be able to read to a buddy so that they can draw it.  Your description must be as detailed and clear as possible so that when you share it with others they will be able to visualise and draw you creature. Use lots of adjectives (describing words - big, small, round, green).

You must .....

• Have a name for your creature
• Start from the big things and work your way to the smaller things
• Describe the shapes
• Describe its neck, body, tail, wings etc.
• What does its head look like?Think about its eyes, nose, eyebrows, mouth, teeth
• Describe its legs/flippers/fins etc.
• What colours is it?
• Any extra details on the body like scales, spikes etc.
• Keep it simple and clear!
• Use correct punctuation and spelling.
• Check that your sentences make sense.

Remember that a good writer ‘paints’ pictures in their reader’s head with words.   This is what good descriptive writing does.  

Create your piece of writing here; Sasha

 

Angitu /Lucky!  

Have you ever seen a Taniwha flying through the sky?  

Well I have and I’m going to tell you about the happiest and hoppiest Taniwha in the land!!!!  

This Taniwha is called Angitu or Lucky.  Angitu has an oval body and a circle shaped head. On Angitu’s head there is a bright tawa horn  and sparkling Mawhero ears like a diamond ruby. Her head is  bright, dazzling kikorangi and her body is a deep purple with two black koros and there is one on Angitu’s head too. She has short rectangular legs that are a deep purple in summer and spring and are a light blue in winter and autumn.  Angitu has tiny wings with spikes at the top and four wavy lines.   Angitu's tail is the exact same as a horse tail  but is a deep purple and blue.  Wherever Angitu flies she leaves a  rainbow trail and when she is happy she hops around with a rainbow floating above her.  My Taniwha is kind and gentle with me and she has a good sense of humor. When I am with Angitu I feel lucky.  Angitu lives in a dome shaped house that is always changing colour.   When Angitu and I are together we fly as high as the clouds and we sometimes  see Ranginui and the hokioi bird sitting on a cloud as soft as marshmallow.    Sometimes we fly to the Islands for a nice long holiday or we dive into the mawhera nui with a enormous splash!!! I love visiting my Taniwha Angitu.

This is Milan's drawing of my taniwha.  This is my drawing of mt taniwha

Peer Evaluation   Name of Peer:  Milan

What I think you did well:  I think she did well on the punctuation

What I think you could improve on:  Nothing

Self Evaluation

What I think I did well: was describing my taniwha.

What I could improve on: putting in more onomatopoeia.